Wednesday, November 18, 2009

My Revision Plan

After reviewing all my peer review sheets, I found out that all my peers knew my general purpose the audience I was targeting. They all also agreed that I grabbed my audience’s attention as well as making sure each of my paragraphs contributed to my overall essay. I did not add my pictures to my word document; therefore, Kelsee and Cortney did not get to see my pictures and see if they were relevant to my essay. Jessica really enjoyed my pictures and thought they did a good job of displaying my talents. Although Cortney thought I needed to add hyperlinks, I do not think I will. I feel as if it does not go with my essay. I talk about how I do art for me. I do not aspire from some other artist. In my opinion, my pictures of my artwork are what I really needed on my essay.

When I read over the comments my peers posted on my blog, I realized I forget to add my title to my actual blog post and they commented on this. They all also really loved my pictures and thought they were very useful in describing my essay. Because of this, I might add more to my final draft for Friday. One other thing they agreed on was that my essay once again flows together well.

For my final draft, I plan on changing the minor errors my peers found in my first draft. I also will make sure I remember to add my title to the blog post this time and possibly add more pictures. Jessica suggested I talk more about why it is my passion and how it makes me feel. Before Friday, I will attempt to add this into my essay. Lastly, I will add my pictures to the word document because I did not realize I was supposed to do that for the first draft.

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